We've been learning persuasive writing and writing conclusion. Please comment down below if there some mistake in my writing.😁
⚽Why sports are better than music🎻
Sports have existed for a very long time. Since 15, 300 years ago sports have been used for entertainment and working as a team. For these reasons I think sports are better than music.
Firstly, sports help you relieve stress. Exercise causes your body to release endorphins, the chemicals in your brain that relieve pain and stress. Studies has shown that 20 to 30 minutes of exercise each day can make people feel calmer.
Secondly, sports increase you energy level, It boosts your mood and attitude. It helps your body adjust to even routine activity that can cause a bleed and other complications, especially in joints muscles weakened by lack of movement.
Thirdly, keeping active through physical activity and sports has many benefits for the body. some of these benefits include increased cardiovascular fitness, bone health, decreased risk obesity, improved sleep, better coordination and balance.
So, I strongly believe, sports are better than music. Everybody think music is better than sports, but sports can be good for our future environment. To make sure sports can be a good environment , we have to contribute, help each other and love sports.⚽💗
Wow Hana, what an impressive piece of persuasive writing. You have:
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- Separated paragraphs with firstly, secondly and thirdly
- Used clear topic sentences
- Included a command/ recommendation in your conclusion
Ka pai!